So I decided to change the last half of my fic and took Cassie to the diner instead of her old house as I wanted to bring more of her previous relationship back into the story as well as bring Sid himself into it quicker (even if only briefly at this moment in time) which I couldnt do with the last draft due to the word limit.
Her heels of ruby red clacked melodically as she strode down the concrete sidewalk, light as always, as though her small frame had been caught in one of the mid-autumn gusts which whirled about the streets, and rustled softly through the golden trees. It had been a long time since she had walked these familiar roads, years in fact, and yet everything seemed to be just as she had left it. The old brick houses, the dreary British sky above, and to her left, the store from which she remembered so long ago cheekily stealing a scarf that she had quite fancied. Where that scarf was now she did not know. She guessed she'd given it away some time ago. She never kept clothes for too long, she always loved giving them away once she'd outworn them, setting them free into the world so that they could live out some fantastical adventure in exotic lands. She imagined now, that knitted wool scarf, twirled around the neck of some beautifully elegant woman, in France perhaps? Yes, France she decided. She could picture her now, sitting on her balcony, a fragile china teacup balanced between her thumb and forefinger, long black hair blowing gently in the wind. How romantic she thought. She'd always wanted to go to France. That would be her next destination. Of course she'd been to a lot of foreign countries since she'd left. Peru, Cambodia, Russia, she particularly enjoyed Japan. The outrageous clothes and colours had made her eyes bulge and her heart swell. Oh how she loved colours. Yellow was her favourite, and orange, and pink, anything bright and cheery that made her lips smile. How she loved to smile.
She couldn't wait to see Reuben, her little Reuben. She imagined he must be so big by now and just as greedy as ever. Her mum and dad would be so glad to see her also, she hoped. She felt guilty that she hadn't said goodbye, or that she'd not spoken to them since. She didn't mean to leave so unexpectedly, but she did. She had to do it. It's not like there was much to stay for anyway. No one had needed her. No one had wanted her. Not even him. Not even Sid...
At the thought of the boy she was once so in love with, her chest began to ache. Why had he not wanted her, what was wrong with her? Was she not as pretty enough? Not as pretty as Michelle? She was definitely thinner, that much gave her some satisfaction. She'd beat Michelle at that at least. She never did understand it, it's not like Michelle had wanted him back anyway, why didn't he see that, why didn't he see how much SHE wanted him. NEEDED him. Her head became flustered. Why was she thinking of this again? After all these years, after all the distance she'd put between them so as to forget the boy who broke her heart, it seemed as though coming back home meant coming back to heartache.
She shook her head, long wavy tresses of gold tousled about her shoulders as she did so and fell still about her face. She looked into a shop window as she passed, her reflection looking back at her. She hadn't changed much she supposed. Her hair was still the same blonde if only slightly longer and slightly wilder. She dressed much the same, a vintage yellow dress with touches of lace, hung off her petite body. Not much protection from the slight chill in the autumn air. She knew she should have worn her cardigan. Thick white tights adorned her legs which disappeared into her ruby red heels. She was just a tiny as always. No weight lost, but no weight gained either. She was pleased about this. She imagined the others would not be if they could see her now. Especially not Sid. He never did like it when she starved herself. Not that she needed to worry herself with such thoughts now, the others were all long gone, just like she herself had been up until now. No need to concern herself with thoughts of awkward encounters or explanations of where she'd been for the last four years. They wouldn't care anyway. They'd probably forgotten all about her, moved on with their new and exciting lives filled with new and exciting people. She couldn’t help but wonder what had become of them all. Where they were now, what they had become. Especially him...
She continued on down the streets she once called home, her light brown eyes drinking in all the memories which surrounded her. Lost in her own thoughts of nostalgia she came to a sudden halt. At first she stood confused, unsure as to why she had stopped, then regaining her focus she looked at the small diner before her and she knew. She had been there so many times before. Rarely had she ever eaten a meal there though. She preferred to sit and observe the people around her. Going about their lives. Eating their cheeseburgers and fries drowned in ketchup, without a care. Without guilt. She would sit, and watch, and wish. Then when she could watch no more she would leave. Only a salt and ketchup smile remaining at the table which she had sat. She also remembered the times she’d spent there with her beloved Sid. She pressed her face to the diner window, hand held above her eyes to shield them from the stinging glare which reflected off the smeared glass. It looked just as it always had. It was as if it could have been four years ago, and for a moment, she revelled in the thought. Her favourite memory flooded her mind, the kiss she and her Sydney had shared here. It wasn’t their first kiss, but it was her favourite.
She scanned the room, her target being the table at which her cherished memory occurred but as she reached her destination her eyes landed upon a face. That face. That face which made her heart begin to pound. What was he doing here? He wasn’t supposed to be here… She panicked. But only briefly, as those thoughts were wiped blank when she saw . Saw that face that she had loved so much, lean over, and saw those lips, those soft pink lips, kiss another’s that were not her own. And in that instant, her pounding heart broke into a million tiny shards which pierced and stung her whole chest and left her breathless.
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The fanfic used the already established plot line of the "Misfits" series but introduced a new character, as what I am assuming to be a new love interest for the character of Nathan. It recounts events from the first episode with the new character incorporated. I do not however feel as though she was fit in well and seemed at times a bit out of place. The writing was okay but I feel lacked description or feeling. The lack of description lead it to seem rather dull and hard to connect with. Although the writer made a fair attempt at staying true to the individual personalities of the characters, the dialogue felt a but unnatural for them and slightly out of character. Overall I think a lot of the writing "told" rather then "showed" what was happening, sounding more like a narration of the character's actions then a descriptive piece. I think improving on this and creating more imagery would have made the story a lot more captivating as the plot has potential to build on the already set storyline of the series and have the added aspects of a new character and potential love interest. 
This story is taken from the perspective of one of the main characters, Cook, and takes place after the finale of this season of the series. It continues on from where the series finished and goes on to describe the way in which this writer believes the characters would have reacted to the final events. It is written all from Cook's perspective, which is appropriate as it focuses on how he and his friends cope with the death of his bestfriend Freddy. I think that by writing it from his point of view it allows this piece to be a lot more personal and emotional then it would have been from a different persons view or from multiple characters' views given the close relationship of the two. The plot is very believable and the way the characters interact with each other is very accurate to how they do so in the series. The dialogue as well, which is often hard to emulate in the voice of the character, was done well and I liked the authenticity of it. The whole thing felt like it really was being told through Cook's mind. I also found it to be extremely well written and had a real sense of emotion. The structure was also interesting with the constant changing of time and scene, giving you brief insights into his thoughts and emotions as they progressed slowly over time and showing rather then telling the amount of time that has passed. 
This fanfiction is based on the world famous Harry Potter series. It is set in the 7th and final book/movie and includes most of the original characters and aspects of the original plot although is not focused strongly around this. It also introduces a number of new characters created by the writer and is taken from the perspective of the newly created character, Delilah. Instead of focusing around the main trio of the series as the books do, the author of this fanfic instead created her own version of what they imagine would have been occurring back at Hogwarts whilst the main heroes were absent. The first chapter in my opinion is slightly confusing as it jumps straight into an apparent love triangle without much explanation or history on the relationships between the characters, making their reactions and they way they act towards each other hard to understand without prior knowledge to why there is hostility. I do like the originality that the author brings into the story by introducing the idea of vampires which is previously not seen in the original Harry Potter stories. I think as a whole the story is enjoyable, especially if you are a fan of the character of Draco, but not amazing. Some of the situations do not seem completely realistic to me and occasionally the characters seem a little unbelievable in their reactions. In most chapters there is a flashback to the past, showing Delilah's change into a vampire and helping to explain her past and why she is the way that she is. Although this does help to explore her personality and develop her into a real being I find that sometimes the flashback are rather long and drag on and often I ended up skipping them altogether as they seemed unrelated to the main story line. 
This fan fic focuses on the relationship between two of the main members of the "Teen Titans" Raven and Beast Boy. It is written from third person point of view and relates well to the original plot as well as relating back to the past episode which inspired it. I find that the writer kept true to the personalities of the characters and the dialogue was also very believable for me. I think that the idea behind the plot of this fanfic is very original and creative and allows the writer to explore the many sides of the character of Beast Boy while also being very entertaining and even slightly comical. The relationship between Beast Boy and Raven is hinted at often in the series however is never officially confirmed and so in this piece, which is set a few years in the future, their relationship is explored more in depth and overall I find it a very beleivable pairing. I do wish that the first few chapters had been a bit longer as they are well written but very short which limits story progression. 
Based on the character Gaara from the popular manga/anime series "Naruto" this fanfic is a third person account of his relationship with another character created by the fanfic writer. Although Gaara is not the main focus of the original Naruto series the writer has chosen to write this peice from his point of view which allows you to see into his mind and explore his personality in a way that you usually can not. The writer was true to the original plot when recounting Gaara's past and I feel did a very good job og staying true to character with his actions and thoughts although possibly making him a little more sadistic then he is in the series. The new character which the writer creates is beleivable and is fit in well to the story. I also think that the use of descritive writting and imagery was done well and made the story very interesting and enjoyable to read.